托福的写作技巧之句子写作中简化之美！

1. 原句：My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parent’s farm.

简化：My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parent’s farm.

分析：使用“repeatedly”代替了“over and over again”,用一个更简单的单词来替换一个长一点的词组。

2. 原句：Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located 100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.

简化：The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100kilometers to the nearest university.

分析：Dairy cows和farm可以使用简短的dairy farm替换，而且dairy farm的含义就包含了Dairy cows were raised on the farm。

把which was located 100 kilometers to the nearest university这个从句改成一个独立的使用逗号连接的同位语，既醒目又简洁。

3. 原句：Every nook and cranny of our life has indeed been teeming with innovations of outstanding merit.

简化：Stunning innovations have penetrated every aspect of our life.

分析：堆砌难词以及短语。这样的句子虽然看起来很华丽，但是实际内容往往不够丰富。同时根据句意看出此句使用被动语态不太必要，用简单的主动语态即可。

4. 原句：However, breakthroughs and accomplishments are nonetheless exploited for illegal and selfish purposes, say, nuclear deterrence, climate change and terrorism.

简化：However, technology can be used for evil, say, nuclear disasters and terrorism.

分析：breakthroughs and accomplishments可以概括成technology，illegal and selfish purposes可以概括成evil，针对同一类型的词汇可以使用一个概括性的单词去替换，避免内容冗长又过于类似。

5. 原句：He has no sense of principle, whether he is in public or in private.

简化：He has no principles, public or private.

分析：提到“……感”或“……意识”，很多人会下意识使用sense of...，其实可以直接报答为no principles。后半句中whether...的结构也可以直接表述成public or private。

下列句子是经典名言，各位同学可以好好分析，可以记下来，做为模仿对象。

1. Living without an aim is like sailing without a compass----John Ruskin

2. The good seaman is known in bad weather.

3. We must accept finite disappointment, but we must never lose infinite hope.----Mattin Luther King.

1. The magazine is immediate popularity as its content is interesting and its language is easy.

2. The future world id the one in which the materials are more abundant and aspiration is getting higher and higher.

3. His children wore ragged clothes and behaved wildly as if they belonged to nobody.

4. When teachers give children lessons, the rhythm of teaching should be fast and the content should be entertaining as they are raised on television asn computer games.

5. A neighbor who would like to help others will get centain help in return.

参考答案

1. The magazine has gained innediate popularity as it is interesting and easy.

2. The future world is the one in which ever growing abundance is matched by ever rising aspiration

3. His children were ragged and wild as if they belonged to nobody.

4. Teachers have to make lessons fast-moving and entertaining for children who are raised on television and computer games.

5. A helpful neighbor often receives help from others in return.